She always liked The sound of keys It helps her identify Her family Her grandparents and parents And even the strangers She remembered the tune In which the keys speak As they jangle On their owner's hips But she can't remember all the keys Because strangers have one key sound She can't tell who is who If she could get to know their keys She can remember The sound of their keys |
Author's Comments
This is a free verse poem. It's my first attempt. Tell me how it is!
Comments
 This started out really good, but the end lost a bit of it's flow, and I'm not sure I liked the last line.
Very cool comparison though.  It's very good! O: I love it~
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-- Maggie: *talking to someone and playing Ice Skating on DS* Kelly's a chicken! Kelly: I'm not a chicken! Maggie: Oh yeah? Then you do the tournament! Kelly: Ok, I'm chicken, I'm chicken. Kelly and Maggie ~ Unknown (Avatar by ~nikitt11) You're welcome! :3
-- I have a M.D. in Sarcasm. =d
-- Maggie: *talking to someone and playing Ice Skating on DS* Kelly's a chicken! Kelly: I'm not a chicken! Maggie: Oh yeah? Then you do the tournament! Kelly: Ok, I'm chicken, I'm chicken. Kelly and Maggie ~ Unknown (Avatar by ~nikitt11) |
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